ext_33865 ([identity profile] astri13.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] astri13 2008-02-11 03:45 pm (UTC)

Sweetie, I love this. I love the way Jen and Jaret change over the course of the story, and I love the way our perception of the other characters shifts in line with Jen's. Personally, I really like the open ending myself (although then that means I don't get to read any more in this 'verse. Oh, decisions, decisions)

Thank you so much. I`m glad you liked the character progression and the way everything evolved. Yay.

Just one tiny thing that irked and you might want to alter is this:
"But peace by peace Jen could feel his body relaxing"
In this context 'peace' should be spelt 'piece', but like I said, just a small thing and not a detraction from the awesomeness of this story.


Ah, fixed. Thanks greatly for pointing it out.

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