Jen ends up sitting on top of him, and he starts saying something like "Now who's on top, your ass is mine!" except half-way through he gets all shy and unsure again.. until he feels a certain body part of Jaret's poking him... and it would be like, Jaret's first time being made love to..
Heh. Me likey. :)
Man, I wish there'd been more Stavus & Krisian. I know this isn't really their story, but I don't think anyone has ever put these two in such a neat setting... and people usually write Steve as gentle and nice, and here you had made him a tough hardened mercenary and then didn't give us more! :PP
I had originally planned to bring them in more but seeing as everything was told from Jen`s viewpoint it was hard to bring that in without seeming contrived.
However since a majority seems to vote Yay to an epilogue, I`m thinking of opening up the narrative on that and including viewpoints/more action from them too.
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Date: 2008-02-11 02:12 pm (UTC)Heh. Me likey. :)
Man, I wish there'd been more Stavus & Krisian. I know this isn't really their story, but I don't think anyone has ever put these two in such a neat setting... and people usually write Steve as gentle and nice, and here you had made him a tough hardened mercenary and then didn't give us more! :PP
I had originally planned to bring them in more but seeing as everything was told from Jen`s viewpoint it was hard to bring that in without seeming contrived.
However since a majority seems to vote Yay to an epilogue, I`m thinking of opening up the narrative on that and including viewpoints/more action from them too.