Another great chapter. And I, for one, am happy to see the story extend to seven chapters, as I am enjoying it, so much, I'm not ready for it to end. =))
Yeaaa, to Jaret deciding to keep Jen, and for him making it clear that he was taking the decision out of Jen's hands, about whether Jen could join his people in slavery, or not. I also loved the line about Jaret not promising to forego seduction, as a way to bring Jen to his bed. Hee.
You did a good job this time, too, of squashing most of those pesky typos. =) Just a couple caught my attention:
"...he le let the tent fall closed once more"
"He didn't know even know why he argued so desperately against Jaret's new plan"
Then with this one, I think you probably meant "pulling", rather than "putting", since Jaret was taking off his soiled tunic:
Unperturbed Jaret finished putting the garment over his head.
And one grammar one:
"when him and Jaret had retreated for the night again:
Should be "he".
Looking forward to the next installment in the saga of healer!Jen and Barbarian!Jaret!
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Date: 2007-12-16 03:34 pm (UTC)Yeaaa, to Jaret deciding to keep Jen, and for him making it clear that he was taking the decision out of Jen's hands, about whether Jen could join his people in slavery, or not. I also loved the line about Jaret not promising to forego seduction, as a way to bring Jen to his bed. Hee.
You did a good job this time, too, of squashing most of those pesky typos. =) Just a couple caught my attention:
"...he le let the tent fall closed once more"
"He didn't know even know why he argued so desperately against Jaret's new plan"
Then with this one, I think you probably meant "pulling", rather than "putting", since Jaret was taking off his soiled tunic:
Unperturbed Jaret finished putting the garment over his head.
And one grammar one:
"when him and Jaret had retreated for the night again:
Should be "he".
Looking forward to the next installment in the saga of healer!Jen and Barbarian!Jaret!